Only I Didn’t Say, “FUDGE!”


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For this week’s post I was inspired by my brother, though accidentally. You see I’m quite the movie quote guy and it all started as a kid with my little brother. We watched tons of movies growing up in the 80’s and with the introduction of the VCR we got to re-watch them repeatedly. I still remember the thrill we had from being ‘gifted’ our own blank, VHS tapes to record our favorite movies! Woo, thanks Dad! You get the idea, we watched a lot of things over and over. One in particular was, “A Christmas Story.” This movie, like so many others, we know by heart and use lines from them in our everyday life.
0_2_no_swearingSo when my brother used ‘fudge’ in a recent tale about him swimming with sharks it got me thinking about foul language in our writing.
When is it acceptable? How often can you use it, or should you use it? Can it be replaced with another word like, ‘fudge’, or ‘chert’? (That last one is a little nod to a friend’s Sci-Fi series, The Terminarch Plot, check it out!)
I’m no expert on any subject of writing, but I am a writer and I have my own opinions on it. That’s why you’re reading this, right? In many ways, I think it comes down to two main things: your target audience, and the characters in the story. There’s also the notion that some foul words are just more acceptable in everyday life, like ‘damn’, and sometimes the synonym of ‘crap’.  Depends on which television channel you’re watching I suppose.
However this doesn’t change the fact the TV writers are taking into account each line of dialogue to best express what that character is trying to say. How different would Friends be if it was full of dirty dialogue? Don’t get me wrong, there’s still some colorful adult references here and there at times, but it would be a different show if it was peppered with the actual words. excessiveSimilarly, imagine this years’ mega-hit movie, Deadpool without the extreme foul language. Love it or hate it, the producers had a specific target audience in mind all along, and they reaped the rewards for it. Had they backed off last minute and softened it to a PG-13 rating, I’m not convinced it would’ve been the smash hit it was. Instead they delivered on the promise of going excessively over the top with outrageous, language and more, but with heart.
Same idea goes with your writing. You’re most likely NOT using foul language if you’re writing a YA romance with the vampire of your dreams. Neither would you write a werewolf horror adventure where the beast hunts down gang members without some occasional blue language. (Note to self: write werewolf story!)
profanity-1024x723Then there’s character traits, and personalities to consider. A bad guy is holding a gun someone’s head and says, “I’ll shoot her in the head, I swear it!” Is that enough to invoke the feelings you want in the scene or should it be, “I’ll splatter her f***ing brains all over the f***ing wall a**hole!” Seems to raise the tension, doesn’t it? On the other hand, a character who curses like a sailor at sea in the beginning of your tale, may change and start catching themselves due to whatever growth you’re putting them through. And let’s face it, some characters are going to be douchebags and curse without restraint, but that doesn’t mean they all need to.
17104Any good writer is going to review, edit, stress out, and debate every single line of their manuscript before releasing it to the public.  You need to do this to ensure it is the best possible product you can provide. Ask yourself, does my character’s words sound mechanic, or does it sound like the way someone actually speaks? Also, is the foul language I’m using trite, therefore it’s lazy writing, or is it necessary for the what I hope to accomplish in the scene?
Now I’m the last person to preach on a soapbox about language, trust me. I just think when it comes to telling a story whether that be a novel, a movie, or even a song, there are good times and bad for using it. Don’t let the language you use be like the obligatory, awkward nude shot present in so many movies! It’s not necessary to move the story along  and only there to please a few people, and I believe your audience can tell the difference. Choosing your words wisely could be what makes your story stand out from being just another book, or a best seller.
Now go write that damn book!

About Jason A. Meuschke

A native Missourian and US Air Force Veteran, Jason also hosts a weekly podcast while making time to write anywhere in between. Any success he attributes to his best friend and wife, Holli (also USAF retired). "She's my biggest supporter!" Together they've raised four children and have been blessed with four grandchildren so far. When Jason isn't working or writing, he's usually found at the lake. As an avid bass fisherman he regularly encourages others to enjoy the outdoors more often. He dreams to one day have a writing career successful enough to let him fish more often. Follow Jason here or on Facebook at Author Jason A. Meuschke to read his occasional blogs of whatever may be on his mind. His books are available on Amazon and don't forget to subscribe to his show, The Sample Chapter Podcast! It is a weekly show where he interviews other authors before they read a sample chapter from one of their books. The Sample Chapter Podcast is available on iTunes, Google Play or anywhere you like to listen.
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5 Responses to Only I Didn’t Say, “FUDGE!”

  1. SBibb says:

    I’ve often wondered the same thing, but I think you’ve pretty well nailed the way I tend to feel about it. While I lean away from swearing when possible, some characters just don’t sound right if they don’t.

    I was reading an article on a similar topic earlier this morning:

    You might find it interesting. 🙂

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  2. rogerdcolby says:

    So perfectly said. Same goes for sex scenes in books. I finished reading Stephen King’s 11/22/63, and there was about a 5 page sex scene I skipped just because he went into extreme detail about the act. (Yes, it was 5 pages long, and not Kindle pages). I felt that it was excessive, and that if I had wanted to read porn (and I don’t) I would have picked up one of those erotic novels people are always trying to sell on my Twitter feed. Nope. Not buying. I don’t do that. My wife is enough, thank you.

    King’s profanity, however, is used in a more character-centric way, where certain characters don’t use it at all, and that should be the way it is in everyone’s novel. I choose not to use it at all for anyone, but in my latest novel series (and thanks for the nod, by the way) I used substitute words from an alien language because I liked how “Battlestar Galactica” (the newer series) used the word “frack”. It gives Guillermo (the main character) an edge while not filling people’s ears with words that are more profane in our culture.

    Good article, bro!

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  3. Well said, Jason. I’ve struggled with this a lot. Ultimately, it comes down to–as you say–the target audience, the characters, and the effect you want to achieve, including the realism of the situation and character. After much thought, I left in my few f-bombs because they ring so natural and because the story is wrong (false) without them, but I would never use profanity out of laziness, to pad out text, or to use it for shock value. I like to write honestly, truthfully. I’ve considered the message of my book and its audience: it’s a dark book with dark life themes (though not immediately obvious in a university and musical setting), the characters are adult (18 and up, which is adult in Alberta), and my audience has definitely been older people with adequate life experience to understand the issues. I’ve considered accessibility to a younger audience, but most youth don’t get much out of the book, and I want my characters to be genuine, not pretentious. The cool thing is that my first f*** kind of glides in, and you have to do a double-take because it comes in after the first sixth of the book (and coincides with the heightening tension the protagonist is experiencing). I have been over this line for years, questioned it, but still think it’s perfect.

    I have to say, though, that sci-fi, fantasy, and other world stuff can make things easier by opening the door to making up your own bad (or any) language rather than being constrained by realism in a realistic fiction novel. J.K. Rowling used “effing,” given her YA audience (what I like is how her characters’ speech “grew” with their ages). I also liked “fracking” in the new Battlestar Galactica.

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